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to Ariel: In a subtle way you seem to focus on the differences between how midwives care for their patients and how doctors/hospitals care for their patients. The narrative you wrote about your mother was moving, it showed how birth and how birth is treated affects not only the mother and child but also the family.

i really valued that you wrote your mothers from an active point of view. for instance you added dialogue that i can imagine you would have used while you were at the hospital with your family.

i think this post would have been even more powerful if you had shared your mothers story and then revealed that despite her horrible experience she still wanted to have her next child in a hospital.

i enjoyed reading your post very much- amanda

 to sarah: hi sarah,

your post puts c-sections and VBACs in perspective for an audience who hasn't yet taken the course.

i thought your use of evidence was especially persuasive. i also think that presenting the risks of VBACs gives the reader a more full educated perspective.

i agree with abdullah that it was courageous to approach a controversial and "underground" topic. it would have been particularly interesting to me if you had possibility obtained an interview from a women or family that had undergone a VBAC.

it was a pleasure reading your post - amanda
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 From Arden:

Amanda,
Often times teens who are pregnant do not seek proper care. Potentially a result of being in denial or the lack of state programs provided for these women.

I enjoyed reading your piece. A topic that us very relevant to us and our lives. I appreciate you taking such a simple topic and researching it in more depth. A valuable aspect of your piece were the facts you used to support you claims. "The most recent recording of the teen pregnancy rate has shown a 3% increase which translates to: out of 1000 pregnancies 72 of them are young women (2006). Most teen pregnancies are unexpected and unwanted which has induced a 50% rise in abortion rates."


From Natalie:

You wrote about teen pregnancy and the lack of prenatal care that they receive.

I thought that the part about how teenagers struggle with eating disorders and do not necessarily understand the importance of giving up drugs and alcohol was very important. While older mothers have a lot on their hands, we must realize that teen mothers need a different kind of support, as they have so much social pressure upon them, especially for something they do not necessarily want to go through.
This matters to me because it is about people in my age group. Just to be aware of this is important. Everyone hears about how to not get pregnant, but not necessarily what to do once you're pregnant. I think you clearly demonstrated the importance of prenatal care for teens here.
Maybe next time you could find a couple examples of teens and their stories.